System administrator

by Sarah Aakirenga
(Kenya)

To obtain practical experience using the knowledge acquired from my academic studies and gain experience in a work environment as part of a proactive team in a professionally challenging environment so as to be proficient in the IT field, through commitment, self discipline and ability to work independently.

Response from Carl: Thanks Sarah. You refer to System Administrator in your Job Title section but give no specifics in your Career Objective as to what systems you work on. I'd love to know what platforms you specialize in and I'm sure hiring managers would like to know the same thing.

You refer to your academic studies but again give no specifics. Do you have a degree or diploma in an IT-related field? If so, I'd mention it specifically in your Career Objective right away so the reader knows you have achieved it. This can help to separate you from people who don't have this degree.

Carl