Recreation and Sports Management

by Tyler John Pederson
(St. Cloud, MN, US)

To find an opportunity with a company that will allow me to utilize my wide range of experience to better improve the company, and to acquire a challenging yet successful future.

Response from Carl: Thanks Tyler. Your Job Title refers to a Recreation and Sports Management position but I wouldn't know this reading the Career Objective since you don't mention anything related to it. Do you have any existing experience in the field that you could refer to? Do you have related education (ie. Sports Management degree? Kinesiology degree?

Currently, your Career Objective is very generic and tends to focus on what you're looking for (ie. you include comments like "find an opportunity," "allow me" and "successful future" which all refer to you) when in fact you want to be showing the reader (ie. hiring manager) what you offer them.

Carl