Graduate Program (Banking and Finance)

by Mandy

Seeking employment in a bank which can utilize my communication and analysis skills combined with a recent Bachelor of Business (Financial Economic extended major).

Response from Carl: Thanks Mandy. Since you're a recent graduate I think it's great that you mentioned your degree. For some reason many people don't do this but you did and that makes sense. You also mentioned your area of focus in Financial Economics which is also good.

Perhaps you could slightly rewrite the end of your statement to read "...combined with a recent Bachelor of Business with an extended major in Financial Economics" just so you can get rid of the brackets.

I suspect you've kept this Career Objective general for the purposes of this exercise but obviously when you apply for a specific job you can change the "Seeking employment..." part of your Career Objective to tailor it for each job you apply for.

Carl