Business Analyst System Analyst

by Nak
(Perth, Australia.)

Seeking an entry-level position in your organisation utilizing my strong analytical and communication skills combined with a Bachelor of Business in Management Information System and to secure a management position in a high growth company with significant advancement opportunities and achieve a dynamic and challenging career in Business and Information Technology industry.

Response from Carl: Thanks Nak. I think this is a good Career Objective for an entry level position. I like that you mentioned your degree up front.

The only thing I could suggest is to take out the things that you're looking for (ie. significant advancement opportunities, etc) and instead focus on just discussing your skills and what you bring to the table. At this point, asking for significant advancement opportunities is probably a bit too much to ask since you're simply trying to secure the interview at this point and you're just beginning your career.

Carl